Just released in November of 2014, Son's Betrayal is the fifth and final novel in the fantasy-based Imperial Series. Follow the misadventures of Emperor Damuk's youngest child, Rowan. What starts out as a harmless boyhood crush quickly turns into something much more dangerous. Son's Betrayal is available in trade paperback and as an ebook (in most formats, including Kindle, Kobo, and Nook).
Read on for an excerpt from the book:
Hearing his mother’s voice echoing through the garden, Rowan
moved further into the bush. It was dark under the foliage, but enough sun made
its way through the leaves to allow him to read well enough. He had to squint,
but he could read. He lowered himself further, laying on his belly and bringing
his nose closer to the open book. He could hide and read at the same time.
“Rowan!”
He glanced over his shoulder at his feet, making sure his
boots wouldn’t be visible from the garden path. Under normal circumstances, he
didn’t mind being caught reading, but these weren’t normal circumstances. He
was supposed to be studying for his history exam. And since the book in front
of him wasn’t his history text, his mother wouldn’t be at all pleased.
“Rowan! Come here this instant!”
She was right on top of him. Taking a deep breath, he
hunched a little more, hoping she wouldn’t look in the bushes. Just in case she
did, he slid the book under his chest. He wasn’t supposed to have this
particular book, and not just because it wasn’t his history text.
He could hear his mother moving about, could even see her
bright blond hair through the leaves. He said a quick prayer and blessed his
own raven locks. He’d blend right in with the dark undergrowth and would
hopefully pass unnoticed. Hopefully…
But then she turned toward him and he knew it wasn’t to
be.
“Rowan, come out of that bush right now.”
She didn’t sound happy. Knowing he was well and truly
caught, he crept out of the bush, leaving the book behind. He did not want her to see that book.
“What were you doing in there?” his mother asked, arms
folded over her chest.
Rowan frowned. Never in all his fourteen years had he had
to think so fast. What could he possibly be doing in a bush that didn’t involve
reading forbidden books?
“Well?” Her green eyes flashed, revealing her
rapidly-retreating patience.
“Nothing.” Swallowing hard, Rowan prayed she would
believe him.
She clearly didn’t. “Nothing? You were hiding in a bush,
ignoring me for a quarter candlemark, all the while doing absolutely nothing?”
Rowan flushed and looked at his boots. It wasn’t easy,
lying to his mother. Even his father couldn’t do it successfully. He swallowed
hard.
With a disgusted sigh, his mother dropped to her knees.
Rowan went to stop her, but was halted by a slender finger pointed straight at
him.
“Don’t,” was all she said.
When he had backed up a step, she reached into the bush
and withdrew an ancient and weathered book. A look of horror spread across her
face as she turned its pages.
“Where did you get this?” she whispered.
Knowing better than to answer that question, Rowan kept his mouth shut. Neither lie nor truth
would help him now. His eyes stayed on his boots and he kept his feet planted.
All the while he was searching for a way out of his current predicament and
trying to escape the feeling of impending doom that had settled in the pit of
his stomach.
His mother scrambled to her feet, book clutched to her
chest.
“Myron,” she called. “Myron!”
Rowan turned to see Admiral Myron pause, then head toward
them.
“Your Majesty.” He gave her a low bow. “Your Highness.” A
smaller bow was given to young Prince Rowan.
“Take my son to his bedchamber and make sure he stays
there.” She clutched the book to her chest. “I have to find my husband.”
“Mother—”
“No.” That finger came out again, halting the words he
would have spoken in his own defense. “I don’t want to hear it. I’m going to
discuss this with your father. Until then, you will stay where Myron puts you.”
Anger raced up his spine and he had to resist the urge to
snap something rude and unflattering at the woman who had given him life.
Straightening his back, Rowan stomped away, smacking a bush and kicking a few
pebbles along the way.
Myron followed at a brisk pace.
***
Empress Arianna watched as her
very-angry youngest son stormed off in the general direction of the palace. She
trusted Myron to do as she’d asked, but she still kept a wary eye on Rowan
until he was beyond her view. When he was gone, she turned away, green eyes
sparkling with frightened tears.
Since she did not want to encounter her son while he was
on his way to his bedchamber, she moved through the gardens and around the
stables. From there she cut through a small wooded area, emerging onto a marble
walk. Turning right, she spotted just the young man she was looking for.
“Payton,” she called, raising her voice so he could hear
her.
Payton turned, saw who was calling him, and moved
straight toward her.
“Majesty,” he greeted with a low bow. He also took her
hand and laid a gentle kiss upon it. Only a few guards enjoyed such a
privilege, and he was one of them.
Arianna waved a nervous hand and clutched the book
harder. “Where is my husband?”
“In the throne room.” At her startled look, he chuckled
and shrugged his shoulders. “I know, I know. He hates it in there just as much
as you do. But he’s receiving those elven envoys this morning. Can’t do that in
the study. Not properly, anyway, and we do want to impress the elves.”
Nodding her understanding, she let out a frustrated sigh.
“Can you quietly inform him that I need to see him at his earliest possible
convenience? I don’t want you to interrupt, but get the message to him.”
Her tone set off an alarm in Payton’s head. “His earliest
convenient or as soon as possible?” He was her eldest son’s best friend. He
knew her too well to be fooled by her attempt at serenity. She was scared and
he knew it.
She clutched at the book again, unsure of how to answer
Payton’s deliberate question. How urgent was it? Enough to pull her husband away
from official business? She’d only rarely interrupted him while he was working,
but she’d only rarely been this upset.
Seeing the Empress freeze in indecision, Payton took the
liberty of placing one hand at the small of her back. He guided her up the wide
marble steps and into the palace. Ignoring the inquiries of a nearby guard, he
kept walking, moving directly to the Emperor’s study. He kept his hand on the
Empress’s back while he opened the door and ushered her inside.
Closing the door softly behind them, he led her to the
long couch against the wall. When she was seated, he walked straight to the
sideboard and poured her a glass of sherry.
“Here,” he murmured as he pressed the glass into her
hand. “Do you want me to send for Tristan? I don’t think he’s doing anything
all that important.” And her eldest son might be of some use right now.
But she shook her head. “Just my husband.”
Payton nodded and left the room.
Left alone, Arianna sipped her sherry in silence. It
calmed her nerves but did nothing to assuage her worries. The book in her hand
burned, urging her to throw it to the floor, but she clung to it stubbornly.
She watched the timing candle on her husband’s desk, silently begging him to
appear with each flicker of the flame.
A quarter candlemark had passed before the door swung
inward and Damuk, Emperor of the Abital Empire, sailed into the room. He saw
his wife’s pale face and tense expression, but that wasn’t what worried him. It
was the fear coursing across the bond they shared that raised the hairs on the
back of his neck.
“What is it?” he demanded as he settled himself beside
her and took her into his arms.
By way of an answer, Arianna released her death grip on
the book. He caught it before it hit the floor, opened it, and let out a
healthy stream of curses.
“Where did you find this?” he growled as he flipped a few
pages.
His ire was already aroused, so she didn’t want to answer
him right away. “It’s one of yours. It’s marked.”
Damuk checked the inside front cover and saw his seal. It
was indeed one of his own books from his own private collection. Again he
cursed, this time louder and more fluently.
“This was taken from the cabinet in our chambers.” He let
out a sigh as his hands turned the yellowed pages. “From the locked cabinet
protected by one of my own spells.”
“Have you lent any out?” Arianna asked, hoping Rowan had
come by the tome by honest means. Perhaps he’d found it in the library or in
his father’s study.
“Some, mostly to Calinda, but not this one.” Damuk showed
her one of the pages. “This one details blood magick. Everything from how to
efficiently gut sacrifices to how to weave death spells powerful enough to
destroy an army. I only have it because my father had it, and he only had it
because it once belonged to his sister.”
Arianna trembled at her memories of Cybil, but she
quickly refocused on the problem at hand. “You’re sure this one never left the
cabinet?”
“Not in years. And even then it was only to show Tristan
what true blood mages are capable of.” He shook his head. “Should have
destroyed the damned thing.”
He was so sure that Arianna had no choice but to believe him.
Rowan had not found the book lying around the palace or carelessly left out on
his father’s desk.
“Where did you find this?” he repeated.
A great sadness filled her. “I caught Rowan with it. He
was in the gardens, hiding from me and hoping I wouldn’t notice he was reading
one of the few books forbidden to the children.”
Damuk himself was rarely sad; anger was his default
emotion. He defaulted to it now.
"Where is he?”
Cuddling closer, she ignored his rising tension. “I had
Myron escort him to his bedchamber. And gave him orders to keep our dear
youngest son from running off.” She grinned up at him. “I think he gets that
from me.”
Clearly not amused, Damuk frowned at her.
She only blinked at him. “You do know that forbidding scowl
has no effect on me?”
He shoved a hand through his hair. “What happened to…”
There was no point in that particular conversation. “Never mind that. Are you
sure Rowan will stay put?”
“If he knows what’s good for him.” She stroked a finger
over the forbidden book. “How did he get it?”
Not having an answer quite yet, Damuk rose and took her
hand. “Come.”
Arianna walked beside her husband, thoughts consumed by
the book he carried. That book detailed magicks only the foulest of blood mages
would dare touch. The very idea that her youngest son might have some interest
in such things tore at her heart. The only blood magick she’d ever known had
been wielded by her husband’s aunt, and that woman had tried to kill her. Oh,
first she’d have used her as an incubator, but Cybil had wanted her dead. And
now her own youngest son…
“Stop thinking about it,” Damuk whispered.
“How do you know what I’m thinking?” she snapped back.
“Are you invading my thoughts?” As a mage, he was fully capable of doing so.
He’d have been offended if her arm hadn’t been shaking.
“I would never,” he replied evenly. “But after thirty years, I think I know you
well enough to guess at your thoughts.”
“And what are my thoughts?”
He dropped a kissed on her temple as he opened the door
that led to their chambers. “You’re thinking about Cybil, about those things
that still give you nightmares.”
Not wanting to talk about it, she strode into the outer
chamber and moved to sit before the expansive fireplace nearest the windows. It
was unlit, but since it was still warm in the chamber, she was grateful. Crown
City was always too warm during the day. Kicking off her slippers, she waited
for her husband to join her.
Damuk glanced from his trembling wife to the cabinet behind
the large desk that graced one end of the outer chamber. Eventually he tossed
the book on the desk, pulled a blanket from a nearby chair, and went to sit by
his wife. She was stressed, and it wasn’t just about the book or the trouble
they’d been having with Rowan. Their daughter-in-law was pregnant with her
fourth child, their daughter was pregnant with her seventh, and neither one was
having an easy time of it. As a skilled healer, his wife had been caring for
them both. She was justifiably tired.
She was so tired that when he sat beside her, she curled
up against him, closed her eyes, and promptly fell asleep. When he was sure she
wouldn’t wake, he lifted her in his arms, kicked open the door to their
comfortable bedchamber, and laid her on the bed with the greatest care. She
turned on her side and he took the opportunity to loosen the laces of her gown.
When she didn’t move, he realized she wouldn’t wake until at least evening. It
was possible she would sleep until morning. He drew a blanket over her and
dropped a kiss on her cheek.
Chuckling to himself, Damuk moved back to the outer
chamber, closing the door softly behind him. He was sixty years old and he was
still carrying his wife to bed. At least she was willing now. That thought made
him laugh outright.
He spotted the book on the desk and all thoughts of
laughter fled. He’d almost forgotten about it. He’d almost forgotten about
Rowan and his most recent transgression. With a heavy sigh he moved toward the
cabinet. In here was where he kept all the most forbidden material. Some of the
more innocuous texts were kept in his study for any of his children to read,
but the book his wife had brought him was far from innocuous. It belonged in
the cabinet in his private chambers.
Calling a spark of magick to his hand, he touched the
lock. He knew immediately it had been tampered with, and that it was Rowan who
had done the tampering. Impressed, Damuk ran his hands over the locks. Rowan
was a mage, but not a powerful one. For him to get past Damuk’s simple protection
spell… he shook his head at the direction his thoughts had taken. He should be
furious, not impressed.
He flung the cabinet doors wide and ran his fingers over
the books within, studying the titles and counting tomes. Only Advanced Blood Magick was missing, and
that one was lying on his desk at the moment. When he was sure all the other
books were exactly where he’d left them, he exerted his magick once again.
There was a hidden drawer he just had to inspect, so he magicked it into its
open position. He slid the drawer out and reached inside.
It was immediately apparent that a few things were
missing. The most obvious was his aunt’s ritual dagger. It had been used for
more sacrifices than he cared to count. For many years, he had thought she
didn’t have a dagger, but eventually her spells had faded. Most spells faded
with the caster’s death, and hers were no exception. When hers had gone, he’d
found the dagger hidden in a wall. As soon as he’d found it, he’d placed it in
this drawer and there it had remained. Until now.
There were other items missing as well. A few candles. An
amulet. Three charms he probably should have destroyed. A deck of cards that
weren’t actually magickal but his wife swore were cursed. The only other thing
missing was a piece of rock Damuk had found attached to his youngest daughter’s
shift four years ago. Why would Rowan take that? He didn’t know of its
existence. His daughter Calinda didn’t know about it. Even his wife didn’t know
about it.
Frowning heavily, Damuk closed the drawer, shut the
cabinet, and took a seat at his desk.
He picked up the book and started to turn
the pages. He examined each page, trying to determine which pages Rowan might
have been reading. Knowing where Rowan’s interest had been focused would tell
him how to react when he eventually confronted his youngest child.
A knock on the door interrupted him.
‘Father?’ came
his eldest son’s respectful mind voice.
‘Come,’ Damuk
responded, trying not to sound annoyed.
The door eased open and Tristan stuck his head in. “Am I
interrupting?”
Damuk shook his head and waved his son forward. When
Tristan was nearly at the desk, Damuk kicked out the chair nearest him,
indicating that Tristan should sit beside him instead of across from him.
Tristan obliged.
“Where’s Mother?” he asked, leaning back in his chair.
“Asleep.” Damuk scowled at his son. “Leave her be.
Between Marella and Jewel, she’s exhausted.”
“Jewel’s really not feeling well,” Tristan complained.
“She really could use Mother’s help.”
The book shut with an audible snap. “Why don’t you try
looking after your wife yourself for an afternoon? And tell William to do the
same.”
Tristan shrugged. “I’m not very nurturing. And William
just stands there wringing his hands.”
“Can neither of you take care of your women?”
“Talk to him.” Tristan was more than a little defensive.
“He’s the one with four daughters he can’t control.”
Damuk raised a dark eyebrow. “And yet it was your
daughter who broke three lamps and a mirror in my study just the other day.”
Tristan laughed. “Yeah, but she can get away with it.”
“She does look remarkably like your mother.” Which
explained why he hadn’t cared about the mirror. He couldn’t stay angry with
Ally any more than he could stay angry with his wife. “Still, you’d be well
advised to marry her off as soon as possible.”
“She’s five.”
Shrugging, Damuk fingered the book. His mind immediately
turned back to Rowan.
Tristan studied his father for a moment before leaning
forward. “What is it?” When his father only looked at him, Tristan frowned and
ran a hand through his raven hair. “Something is bothering you, and I don’t
think it’s Ally and the broken mirror.”
Without another word, Damuk pushed the book toward his
son. He watched Tristan’s green eyes widen as he flipped through the ancient
tome. Finally, Tristan looked up.
“Did you just take this out?”
Damuk shook his head. “Your mother caught Rowan with it.
He was hiding in the gardens.”
Green eyes blinked at him. “He took it from the cabinet?”
“I was just as surprised. He shouldn’t have been able to
get around my enchantments.” The idea that his son might already be practicing
blood magick was a chilling one.
Tristan put the book back on the desk and wiped his hands
on his breeches as if he felt unclean. “I will say this. If any one of us would
turn to blood magick, it would be Rowan.”
The Emperor’s blue eyes flashed. “I would have thought
Calinda.”
But Tristan shook his head. “Callie only used blood
magick to save herself, and she never spilled the blood of another. She might
be attracted to blood magick, but her conscience wouldn’t allow her to actually
hurt someone.”
“And Rowan?” Damuk knew his eldest son could be amazingly
insightful when it came to his siblings.
“Rowan is a worry.” He tried to put his feelings into
words that made sense. “Rowan is the jealous type. He resents the fact that
he’s not as powerful as Callie or even me. He wants power, and his morals are a
little questionable right now.”
“Because he’s an adolescent.” Damuk sighed and leaned
back. “And adolescents want what they want, and they want it now.”
Tristan nodded. “And right now, he wants power. Blood
magick might be the only solution he can see.”
None of that made Damuk feel any better.
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Friday, December 26, 2014
Excerpt From "Son's Betrayal", Book 5 of the Imperial Series, by LA Quill
Friday, August 29, 2014
Writing a Novel: Voice and Character
The term 'voice' is used in a few different ways when it comes to literature. Often it is used to describe the author's voice, the style that makes his or her writing truly unique. This kind of voice tends to be consistent between stories, even when it shouldn't be. But there is another kind of voice, the kind that doesn't travel from story to story. This is the voice of your character, or characters, and is highly dependent on the story itself. Character voice is inescapable, and it is vital to a quality story, novel or otherwise.
Character voice is a powerful tool for writers, and it is especially important when it comes to characterization. The voice, or tone, of a particular piece of writing gives the reader further insight into the characters the writer creates. You can't escape voice, even if you want to, because all stories are told by someone. There may not be a clear narrator (as is the case with many third person narratives), but there is always a voice, and that voice should be consistent throughout the piece.
Even though every story has a voice, it is easier to note when the story is told through the first person narrative. When a story is written from the first person point of view, you are reading the narrative of the character just as if you were listening to the character's thoughts. In first person stories, voice is usually easy to identify.
Third person narration, however, has far more variations, sometimes making it more difficult to notice the voice of the story. In some forms, third person narrative is just another form of first person, simply replacing I with he or she. Sometimes third person involves a neutral voice, one where the narrator is above the character, not inside the character's head. Third person can also mean dropping into the head of any character at any time. In many third person narratives, the voice of the novel is not consistent with any particular character, or may change to reflect essence of different characters throughout the piece, but that doesn't mean these narratives lack voice.
As a writer, you get to develop the overall voice of your novel. It is totally within your control. As such, it becomes a powerful tool in developing your characters, both major and minor. Too many authors overlook voice as it relates to character development, but it really is very simple. Start by checking yourself frequently. The story is not about you (unless it's an autobiography or a memoir). It's about the characters themselves, and the voice of your story should reflect that. Try to take yourself out of the writing and focus on the characters.
When you're writing, think about the characters who is closest to your point of view. If your point of view is first person, the character is obvious. Third person takes a little more thinking, but you are almost always closer to one character than any others. The focus character may shift if you're writing in third person omniscient, so pay attention to these shifts. A shift in focus character means a shift in voice.
Once you know who your focus character is, address the language you're using. Newer up in flowery language or lengthy words, but this isn't always appropriate for your focus character. The language you use should be consistent with the character in question. If your character doesn't even know what 'loquacious' means, he or she certainly wouldn't say or even think that particular word. Choose something more in keeping with the character you're developing.
This might seem like it applies only to dialogue, but that's not true at all. Your descriptions, your dialogue tags, and everything else should use the same grammar and vocabulary your focus character would use. To an extent, anyway. If your character speaks in gibberish, please clean it up. And don't make spelling errors even if your character would. The point is there shouldn't be a word your character doesn't know or couldn't pronounce, but your writing should still make sense. Let the tone of the story reflect your characters, but don't use that as an excuse for poor writing or horrible grammar.
As a writer, you best serve your story by taking yourself out of the equation. In most cases, the novel shouldn't sound like you're narrating it at all. Your voice, the author's voice, should disappear in favor of your characters. This is a simple concept, but it can be hard to accomplish. You'll have to review every sentence, look at them with unbiased eyes. I don't pretend this is easy, but your story will be better for it.
Character voice is a powerful tool for writers, and it is especially important when it comes to characterization. The voice, or tone, of a particular piece of writing gives the reader further insight into the characters the writer creates. You can't escape voice, even if you want to, because all stories are told by someone. There may not be a clear narrator (as is the case with many third person narratives), but there is always a voice, and that voice should be consistent throughout the piece.
Even though every story has a voice, it is easier to note when the story is told through the first person narrative. When a story is written from the first person point of view, you are reading the narrative of the character just as if you were listening to the character's thoughts. In first person stories, voice is usually easy to identify.
Third person narration, however, has far more variations, sometimes making it more difficult to notice the voice of the story. In some forms, third person narrative is just another form of first person, simply replacing I with he or she. Sometimes third person involves a neutral voice, one where the narrator is above the character, not inside the character's head. Third person can also mean dropping into the head of any character at any time. In many third person narratives, the voice of the novel is not consistent with any particular character, or may change to reflect essence of different characters throughout the piece, but that doesn't mean these narratives lack voice.
As a writer, you get to develop the overall voice of your novel. It is totally within your control. As such, it becomes a powerful tool in developing your characters, both major and minor. Too many authors overlook voice as it relates to character development, but it really is very simple. Start by checking yourself frequently. The story is not about you (unless it's an autobiography or a memoir). It's about the characters themselves, and the voice of your story should reflect that. Try to take yourself out of the writing and focus on the characters.
When you're writing, think about the characters who is closest to your point of view. If your point of view is first person, the character is obvious. Third person takes a little more thinking, but you are almost always closer to one character than any others. The focus character may shift if you're writing in third person omniscient, so pay attention to these shifts. A shift in focus character means a shift in voice.
Once you know who your focus character is, address the language you're using. Newer up in flowery language or lengthy words, but this isn't always appropriate for your focus character. The language you use should be consistent with the character in question. If your character doesn't even know what 'loquacious' means, he or she certainly wouldn't say or even think that particular word. Choose something more in keeping with the character you're developing.
This might seem like it applies only to dialogue, but that's not true at all. Your descriptions, your dialogue tags, and everything else should use the same grammar and vocabulary your focus character would use. To an extent, anyway. If your character speaks in gibberish, please clean it up. And don't make spelling errors even if your character would. The point is there shouldn't be a word your character doesn't know or couldn't pronounce, but your writing should still make sense. Let the tone of the story reflect your characters, but don't use that as an excuse for poor writing or horrible grammar.
As a writer, you best serve your story by taking yourself out of the equation. In most cases, the novel shouldn't sound like you're narrating it at all. Your voice, the author's voice, should disappear in favor of your characters. This is a simple concept, but it can be hard to accomplish. You'll have to review every sentence, look at them with unbiased eyes. I don't pretend this is easy, but your story will be better for it.
Friday, June 20, 2014
Writing a Novel: Detail and Character
Most things in a novel are communicated using details. In many cases, the quality of fiction is equal to the quality of the conveyed details. Note that I said QUALITY. Not quantity. The details you choose to convey will determine how successfully the reader is able to put themselves into the story. Too few details and your readers won't have enough information to get involved. Too much and the story gets bogged down. It's a delicate balance.
This is also true of the details used to describe the characters in your novel. It is possible to go on and on for pages without imparting anything of any value, especially when discussing your characters. Think about the last time you asked someone to describe a person you'd never met. You'll get responses like, "He has brown hair," "He's five foot nine," or maybe, "He's got wide shoulders." None of that tells you anything important (and certainly doesn't help you pick him out of a crowd), so you ask what he is like. You'll likely hear the familiar refrain, "He's nice." Or maybe the opposite, "He's annoying." Again, this tells you nothing. Five minutes of your life you'll never get back.
Most people are really awful at describing someone in useful terms. Most descriptions are just too general, and generalizations are completely useless in fiction. Almost everyone could be described as nice in some situations, but annoying in others. These are not individual traits, and the art of characterization (at least in fiction) deals with the individual. So your job as an author is to make sure the reader understands how this character is different from all other people.
To accomplish this, you have to provide details that are specific enough that the reader can begin to construct that character in their own minds. If you do your job correctly, they should almost be able to see the character your describe. Every detail doesn't have to be completely unique to that character (let's face it, more than one person has blond hair, and many people shout when angry), but the combination of details should add up to construct a character who is immediately recognizable.
So how do you do this? First, choose the right details to convey character. Being scattered about it just doesn't work, and irrelevant details bog down your story. Don't describe the birthmark on a character's foot unless it has something to do with your story. Do they use the birthmark to identify the body? It is used in the plot in any way at all? No, then leave it out. A detail with no purpose becomes ridiculous. Make sure the plot is motivating you to reveal that detail.
Now that you've determined what details are important, you have to decide how to reveal them. Don't do it all at once because it will come off as a list. No one lists the specific details of anyone unless they've been asked to (which only rarely happens, by the way). Is a character's hair getting in her eyes? This might be a good time to casually mention her hair and eye color. Does she have pale skin? Or dark skin? Is there a casual way to reveal this (hint: Yes, there is)? You can always have another character notice physical details (as long as your using third person point-of-view), but again, only mention then if they're important to the story in some way.
When it comes to a character's personality, which is the most important part of characterization, the only good way to do it is to demonstrate personality. Use dialogue effectively to show how your character reacts to given situations. And if you've got any internal dialogue at all, make sure it reflects your character's personality. To do all this, you have to know your characters as well as you know yourself, so take some time to get to know them. Then you can impart the pertinent details to your reader.
There is a delicate balance when it comes to the details you'll need to create an effective and interesting character. Choose your details carefully, and remember that a detail is only as good as the reader who recognizes it and understands what it means. So be clear, be concise, and don't be afraid to hit 'delete' and start again.
This is also true of the details used to describe the characters in your novel. It is possible to go on and on for pages without imparting anything of any value, especially when discussing your characters. Think about the last time you asked someone to describe a person you'd never met. You'll get responses like, "He has brown hair," "He's five foot nine," or maybe, "He's got wide shoulders." None of that tells you anything important (and certainly doesn't help you pick him out of a crowd), so you ask what he is like. You'll likely hear the familiar refrain, "He's nice." Or maybe the opposite, "He's annoying." Again, this tells you nothing. Five minutes of your life you'll never get back.
Most people are really awful at describing someone in useful terms. Most descriptions are just too general, and generalizations are completely useless in fiction. Almost everyone could be described as nice in some situations, but annoying in others. These are not individual traits, and the art of characterization (at least in fiction) deals with the individual. So your job as an author is to make sure the reader understands how this character is different from all other people.
To accomplish this, you have to provide details that are specific enough that the reader can begin to construct that character in their own minds. If you do your job correctly, they should almost be able to see the character your describe. Every detail doesn't have to be completely unique to that character (let's face it, more than one person has blond hair, and many people shout when angry), but the combination of details should add up to construct a character who is immediately recognizable.
So how do you do this? First, choose the right details to convey character. Being scattered about it just doesn't work, and irrelevant details bog down your story. Don't describe the birthmark on a character's foot unless it has something to do with your story. Do they use the birthmark to identify the body? It is used in the plot in any way at all? No, then leave it out. A detail with no purpose becomes ridiculous. Make sure the plot is motivating you to reveal that detail.
Now that you've determined what details are important, you have to decide how to reveal them. Don't do it all at once because it will come off as a list. No one lists the specific details of anyone unless they've been asked to (which only rarely happens, by the way). Is a character's hair getting in her eyes? This might be a good time to casually mention her hair and eye color. Does she have pale skin? Or dark skin? Is there a casual way to reveal this (hint: Yes, there is)? You can always have another character notice physical details (as long as your using third person point-of-view), but again, only mention then if they're important to the story in some way.
When it comes to a character's personality, which is the most important part of characterization, the only good way to do it is to demonstrate personality. Use dialogue effectively to show how your character reacts to given situations. And if you've got any internal dialogue at all, make sure it reflects your character's personality. To do all this, you have to know your characters as well as you know yourself, so take some time to get to know them. Then you can impart the pertinent details to your reader.
There is a delicate balance when it comes to the details you'll need to create an effective and interesting character. Choose your details carefully, and remember that a detail is only as good as the reader who recognizes it and understands what it means. So be clear, be concise, and don't be afraid to hit 'delete' and start again.
Friday, June 13, 2014
Writing a Novel: Keeping Your Characters in Character.
All fiction is, or should be, character driven. The details of the plot should arise from the decisions the characters themselves make, and from the changes that occur within the characters as a result of those decisions. If you allow your characters to drive the story, the question of what happens next is easy enough to answer. You simply have to determine what your characters would naturally do next. You must keep your character in character.
The range of possible reactions of a single character will not be the same as the range of possible reactions for all characters everywhere. To illustrate this point, think of two people you know, two very different people. Propose a scenario, perhaps getting fired at work for no good reason. What are the possible reactions for each person? They'll likely be quite different. This must also be true of fictional characters. What your characters do and how they react to any given stimuli should be a direct result of personality. The personality of the character. Keep that in mind.
Think of your story, short or long, as a series of decision points. The decision points guide the story, and each decision made is a result of the personality of a given character. I'll use my first book, Arianna's Tale, as an example of this. At the beginning of the novel, Arianna sees a man in the ocean. This man has dark hair and a dark complexion, so he's obviously an Imperial. Arianna's people are at war with the Imperials. She should leave him be, letting the ocean swallow him. But, as a healer, she simply can't do that. She has to save him. Not doing so was never an option. If she hasn't save him...well, let's just say the novel would have been quite different.
If you've ever said the story was writing itself, or complained that the characters had taken over, then you already know what it feels like to allow the characters to drive the story. If you know your characters well enough, this simply happens. You don't have to think about what happens next because it really is obvious. This applies to dialogue as well as plot, by which I mean you don't have to agonize over every line of dialogue. The characters speak the way they speak, and they never speak out of character.
If, however, you don't really know your characters, you're in for a long haul. The story will get bogged down, the plot ends up going nowhere, and the dialogue falls flat. If this is happening to you, take a close look at your characters. Get to know them. Find out their backstories, write monologues in their voices, and maybe even interview your character.
Ack! Interviewing your own character? Yep. Sit down and ask them questions, both relating to the story and totally independent of it. How would each character answer these questions? This may take some careful thought, but it will be well worth the effort. Once the characters are truly alive for you, once their have realized their own voices, they'll have more power in your story. Your plot will benefit from it, and you'll have a better than even chance than even chance that readers will connect with your characters.
You could always go the other way and force the characters to go where you want them to go, but the story will forever have a false feel to it. Plot and character are too deeply connected to isolate from each other. If your characters aren't right, the plot will also be off.
Remember, the plot only makes sense if the character can deliver it effortlessly. So keep your characters in character.
The range of possible reactions of a single character will not be the same as the range of possible reactions for all characters everywhere. To illustrate this point, think of two people you know, two very different people. Propose a scenario, perhaps getting fired at work for no good reason. What are the possible reactions for each person? They'll likely be quite different. This must also be true of fictional characters. What your characters do and how they react to any given stimuli should be a direct result of personality. The personality of the character. Keep that in mind.
Think of your story, short or long, as a series of decision points. The decision points guide the story, and each decision made is a result of the personality of a given character. I'll use my first book, Arianna's Tale, as an example of this. At the beginning of the novel, Arianna sees a man in the ocean. This man has dark hair and a dark complexion, so he's obviously an Imperial. Arianna's people are at war with the Imperials. She should leave him be, letting the ocean swallow him. But, as a healer, she simply can't do that. She has to save him. Not doing so was never an option. If she hasn't save him...well, let's just say the novel would have been quite different.
If you've ever said the story was writing itself, or complained that the characters had taken over, then you already know what it feels like to allow the characters to drive the story. If you know your characters well enough, this simply happens. You don't have to think about what happens next because it really is obvious. This applies to dialogue as well as plot, by which I mean you don't have to agonize over every line of dialogue. The characters speak the way they speak, and they never speak out of character.
If, however, you don't really know your characters, you're in for a long haul. The story will get bogged down, the plot ends up going nowhere, and the dialogue falls flat. If this is happening to you, take a close look at your characters. Get to know them. Find out their backstories, write monologues in their voices, and maybe even interview your character.
Ack! Interviewing your own character? Yep. Sit down and ask them questions, both relating to the story and totally independent of it. How would each character answer these questions? This may take some careful thought, but it will be well worth the effort. Once the characters are truly alive for you, once their have realized their own voices, they'll have more power in your story. Your plot will benefit from it, and you'll have a better than even chance than even chance that readers will connect with your characters.
You could always go the other way and force the characters to go where you want them to go, but the story will forever have a false feel to it. Plot and character are too deeply connected to isolate from each other. If your characters aren't right, the plot will also be off.
Remember, the plot only makes sense if the character can deliver it effortlessly. So keep your characters in character.
Friday, May 2, 2014
Review of "Deryni Magic" by Katherine Kurtz
Yes, I know. Deryni Magic, written by Katherine Kurtz, is an old book. Old enough that it's out of print and I had to buy one to replace my old one from eBay. Still, I've decided to review the books I've been reading, and since I just re-read this one, time for a review.
If you're interested in Kurtz's Deryni series, this book will help you further explore that world. It gives some additional details into the history of the Deryni and explains much of they magic they use in the many Deryni books. It's also a good way to fill in the gaps. If you want some specifics on the magic used in the novels, this is the book you need. Especially for those trying to figure out all the references to warding cubes in the novels. It's all well explained here.
That said, it's not a good stand-alone book. If you haven't read any Deryni books (or didn't enjoy them), this one is likely to be more than a little boring. It is written rather like a history, so it's a bit dry. You need to be a fan of the many Deryni novels to get anything out of Deryni Magic. Remember that this book is not a novel. It's not a story with character development, or really any characters at all. It's a companion book, a grimoire, and should be approached as that. If you're looking for a story, this is not the book for you.
All in all, I'd give Deryni Magic 4 stars out of 5. Why not a full five? The prose leaves something to be desired. Even a history can be written so that it's not entirely boring.
If you're interested in Kurtz's Deryni series, this book will help you further explore that world. It gives some additional details into the history of the Deryni and explains much of they magic they use in the many Deryni books. It's also a good way to fill in the gaps. If you want some specifics on the magic used in the novels, this is the book you need. Especially for those trying to figure out all the references to warding cubes in the novels. It's all well explained here.
That said, it's not a good stand-alone book. If you haven't read any Deryni books (or didn't enjoy them), this one is likely to be more than a little boring. It is written rather like a history, so it's a bit dry. You need to be a fan of the many Deryni novels to get anything out of Deryni Magic. Remember that this book is not a novel. It's not a story with character development, or really any characters at all. It's a companion book, a grimoire, and should be approached as that. If you're looking for a story, this is not the book for you.
All in all, I'd give Deryni Magic 4 stars out of 5. Why not a full five? The prose leaves something to be desired. Even a history can be written so that it's not entirely boring.
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